Thursday, March 22, 2012

Writing. Again?

woke up with an inspiration after my afternoon nap and i jumped at the fact of new ideas...
my fingers went straight to my computer, my keyboards actually and started working...
could my inspiration come from a dream? but i don't remember dreaming...
or could my character, be inspired by the busy streets of 5th Avenue New York, the coming summer here and Katniss Everdeen, a character in the Hunger Games that i've read recently...
without further ado, i shall put up my first two paragraphs and hunt for comments, which i doubt i could get from any of you since no one reads my blogs anyways...

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Title: Charlie and Me

She walked down the street in a flowy white summer dress and beautiful Bohemian braids when she caught my eyes, and more, my heart. That was the first time her fragrance of orchids fill my nostrils as she walked past me. Her glowing olive skin and piercing green eyes looked past me as she gave me a little smile, a smile of an angel. Taken aback by her beauty, I could do nothing but smile back, an awkward smile actually. She burst out laughing as she walked past me. And I couldn’t help laughing at myself despite my embarrassment. I covered my face with my palms to hide my cheeks, both turning red in this crimson sun. Were they turning red because it’s hot out here in the summer heat, or was it because I was flushed in embarrassment?

It wasn’t till I heard a thud. I lifted my face to see, the girl, the very same girl with the flowy summer dress and romantically Bohemian braided hair on the floor. She must’ve tripped on the cracks along the sidewalk and fell. That’s when I saw that she wore these beautiful chunky wedges with beautifully designed straps that could match the famous Jimmy Choo. With a small gasp, an “Oh!”, I quickly ran towards her. While helping her up, I could not help it but apologize, feeling as though her trip could be my fault for distracting her. That’s when our eyes meet. Hers in a shade of green, deep green, almost jade green I could say, and mine, my not so interesting dark brown eyes. Those eyes, I could remember them till this day. Something struck us there. Could it be that the ever popular myth of love at first sight, the one I’ve brushed aside since my previous lover dumped me for another man, is actually true? Did I tell you about her hair, her romantically braided hair? Up close, I saw her hair. Her hair was wavy, chestnut brown in color, and the feature that struck me the most, the smell of orchids that could not be from anything other than the bottle of Herbal Essence that I’m all so familiar with. Perfection, that’s the only word I could describe her.

-to be continued.....

i couldn't find a more suitable picture, so, this would do

12 comments:

Anonymous said...

The short story is very reminiscent of Peeta from the Hunger Games. It's almost as if you were the same person.
Looking forward to the continuation :)

jad Y said...

Thanks Anonymous...
i'm planning to work on it...
now that you've mentioned it, i do see or rather, my friends do see a lil Peeta in me..
i wonder if i know you in real life...
if i do, great!
if i don't, nice to meet you. :)

Anonymous said...

well unlike him I hope you get the girl in the end! :)
And yeah...you do know me in real life.well sorta

jad Y said...

but Peeta did get married to Katniss,in Mockingjay.... sorta? what does it mean???

Anonymous said...

....ok yeah i hav not read mocking jay yet...sigh sigh.

well you do know who i am but we have never actually met in real life. its complicated right now :)

jad Y said...

i've not read it too but i've read the plot...
i do know you but never actually met... care to enlighten me?
why so mysterious??? btw, part 2 is up

Anonymous said...

I'm going to read it soon, so no more spoilers k!!
read your part 2 and i am convinced there is a tiny awesome writer in you.

actually you do know who i am but i put the comments and an anon so you won't feel like what I'm saying is biased. we have never talked face to face but we have many mutual friends, most of which are from FGA KD.

Try not to crack your head to who i am k (it will only make an ouchie to your brain), I just posted up a comment to encourage you to write so that you won't feel like no one cares.
I'm just saying I care and no matter what crap the world gives us, you should not put yrself down because others don't see or rather don't say that you are important to them.

I enjoy all your posts so don't judge yrself by what other people say or don't say. be confident in Christ and everything else will settle itself in time. :)

jad Y said...

thanks.... hehe...
i think i got a hunch at who you are...
Steph Duke?
just a hunch...
if i'm wrong, i'm too lazy to guess more... hahaha

Anonymous said...

....you are too good at guessing

jad Y said...

i know right...
*takes a bow

stephananious said...

will there ever be a part 3?

jad Y said...

how could i just hang the story with a cliffhanger....
it won't be Charlie and Me then, it'll just be, Bumping into Charlie... hahaha...